Please post your revised final draft of Essay 1 to this Dropbox folder: https://www.dropbox.com/request/xKntURQSQZ2Zj30TY3xH.
Make sure you follow all submission, formatting and assignment guidelines.
College Writing 1: Monsters and/in Culture | Spring 2018
A COURSE SITE FOR ENGLISH 110, SECTIONS 3 & 26 | Professor Christopher Williams
Please post your revised final draft of Essay 1 to this Dropbox folder: https://www.dropbox.com/request/xKntURQSQZ2Zj30TY3xH.
Make sure you follow all submission, formatting and assignment guidelines.
Post your revision of your thesis as a comment below. Follow the revision procedure we used in class today.
A strong thesis should:
Use simple sentence structure to make sure that your ideas are clear for your reader.
Review my comments on the thesis revisions you submitted for in-class writing on Tuesday. Continue to revise your thesis and body paragraphs. Bring your revised formal draft of Essay 2 (as a printed or digital copy) with you to class on Thursday. You will continue to work on your formal draft during class.
Also make sure you can access your final draft of Essay 1.
Post your revised thesis for Essay 2 as a comment to this post. Then identify all the sub-points in your thesis. These sub-points should be developed and supported in the analysis paragraphs of your essay. See the example below:
This advertisement is telling its viewers that they can increase their social status (1) and add exceptional adventure to their lives (2) by purchasing Land Rover vehicles (3). To convey this message, the advertisement symbolizes a culture foreign (4) to its Western viewers (5), appealing to their fears that they are living unexciting lives (6). The Land Rover logo provides a solution to this fear (7); by buying a Land Rover, the viewer can escape a regular lifestyle and experience exotic cultures that only few can afford to enjoy.
The purpose of this exercise is to improve the organization of your argument by making your PAS outline more specific.
Estimated time: 45 mins
Due by 9:30 a.m. Tuesday, March 27th
Carefully re-read the Effective Paragraphing handout. For the formal draft of your lens analysis essay, you were asked to write out the PAS outline of your essay. For this exercise, you will revise it to make it more specific. To clearly explain what a paragraph is doing (in terms of PAS), you must specify what is being presented, analyzed or synthesized. For example:
Presentation. This paragraph presents a summary of “Masters of Desire,” an essay exploring how American advertising reveals core features of American culture.
Analysis. This paragraph analyzes the wildebeest eyeballs in the center of the advertisement to argue that it is “monstrous” according to Cohen’s definition of the term.
Synthesis. This paragraph complicates the viewer’s understanding of the advertisement and draws a preliminary conclusion about the message of the advertisement.
Submit your revised PAS outline as a comment below. Start off by copy-and-pasting your thesis, then write out the specific function of each paragraph in your draft as demonstrated above.
The goal of this exercise is to produce a revised formal draft of your second essay. To produce your formal draft, you will extensively revise and develop your zero draft using ideas from class and suggestions provided in my feedback.
Estimated time: 2-3 hours
Due by 11:59 p.m. Sunday, March 25th
Assignment
Estimated time: 30 mins
Due by 9:30 a.m. Thursday, March 22nd
As discussed in class, the formal draft of Essay 2 will not be due on Thursday. Instead, please read the Effective Paragraphing handout and the Model Lens Analysis essay in preparation for Thursday’s class.
Estimated time: 1 hour
Due by 9:30 a.m. Tuesday, March 20th
There is no writing due for this homework assignment. Instead please re-read the essays “Monster Culture” and “Masters of Desire” and the reading titled “Linking Evidence and Claims.”
The goal of this exercise is to produce a very rough draft (a “zero draft”) of your second essay. This will help you find raw material (i.e. potential evidence and rough ideas) that can be refined and further developed in your formal draft. Reminder: this draft should be very messy. I want you to explore *ideas* and not worry about making (or fixing) grammatical mistakes. You can use a combination of English and other languages if you’d like. If this draft is polished and free of grammatical errors, it means you did not follow my instructions.
Estimated time: 2-3 hours
Due by 11:59 p.m. Friday, March 16th
Assignment
ALTERNATIVELY, you can freewrite to answer all the questions in the Visual Analysis handout and submit this as your zero draft.
List all the important visual elements in the advertisement that you will analyze for Essay 2. Post your response below. (10 minutes)